11-07-2008, 02:28 AM
To post or not to post, that is the question. Whether 'tis better to label with [Lemon] and [NSFW], or suffer the hacks and slashes of censorious editing... My heart is sore conflicted, for I desireth commentary on story and plot direction, yet I hath no wish to give offense. The musae have granted a chapter nearing 40Kb and story notes nigh half as great besides, a tale of insertion gone wrong in the land of Fire.
Insertion indeed! An insert inserted, for through unfortuitous happenstance, the insertee arrives within the fox most terrible, only to be inserted in young Uzumaki postehaste, sealed for the sins of the replaced. Her attitude most improved o'er the demon of legend, she takes the young lad to her breast 'pon wakening some years hence, and gives of her strength and wisdom under false guise of "Himitsu," false name yet true heart.
Alas! The agony of indescision! Mine heart is troubled sore! What say you, kind gentlemen? What say you, fair ladies? King Schroek, lord of this domain! My liege I pray you, speak! Give your judgement on this matter, that my soul may know the peace I seek!
- CD
Later: No, the fic itself is not written in florid Shakespearian prose. Not that it would neccesarily be an unworkable idea, but not this go, at any rate. I suppose I should mention the title, too - it's "Open Mouth, Insert... Tails?" or OMIT for short.
Even later: I'd rather have seen a 64Kb writing binge on BDis or LoXY!, even XOG or TCD than yet another new project... my horndogness may have sparked the thing off, but only about three paragraphs of that are actual explicit material, the rest is (more family oriented) character interaction, plot and training notes. Unfortunately those characters just weren't talking to me, even if a few references to LoXY! did sneak in here and there, like Ino's dad comparing Naruto's grin to Gai's and thanking the kami the kid didn't get assigned to him when he has that kind of untrained talent at being blindingly sparkly.
Gah, I've said it before, I'll say it again, I suck at porn... I set out planning to write mindless magically-transgendered sex and end up with a few sprinkles of heat over a big chunk of plot and character development. Jiraya would be ashamed of me.
The next day: Okay, now I see where my porn-writing skills failed, it was in having the insert-kyuubi make early contact with naruto, instead of letting it go to have first contact when Jiraya throws Naruto off a cliff, and meaningful dialogue not occur until the timeskip... because the best parts of the story are earlier, but by touching on things before N is old enough physically let alone emotionally to participate it neccessitates plot and character story elements. Yes, I know, I should have seen that from the beginning. D'oh. The thing is, I LIKE the way the story is shaping up in my notes, letting the Mothra Effect run wild without worrying about what it will mean down the road, because I now know that what was coming down the road sucked anyway. It's like the Butterfly Effect, only much, much bigger! To say it bluntly: If a butterfly flapping its wings in Tokyo can cause a hurricane in San Franciso, what happens when Mothra attacks?
[small]Kyuubi-dooby-doo![/small]
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows
Insertion indeed! An insert inserted, for through unfortuitous happenstance, the insertee arrives within the fox most terrible, only to be inserted in young Uzumaki postehaste, sealed for the sins of the replaced. Her attitude most improved o'er the demon of legend, she takes the young lad to her breast 'pon wakening some years hence, and gives of her strength and wisdom under false guise of "Himitsu," false name yet true heart.
Alas! The agony of indescision! Mine heart is troubled sore! What say you, kind gentlemen? What say you, fair ladies? King Schroek, lord of this domain! My liege I pray you, speak! Give your judgement on this matter, that my soul may know the peace I seek!
- CD
Later: No, the fic itself is not written in florid Shakespearian prose. Not that it would neccesarily be an unworkable idea, but not this go, at any rate. I suppose I should mention the title, too - it's "Open Mouth, Insert... Tails?" or OMIT for short.
Even later: I'd rather have seen a 64Kb writing binge on BDis or LoXY!, even XOG or TCD than yet another new project... my horndogness may have sparked the thing off, but only about three paragraphs of that are actual explicit material, the rest is (more family oriented) character interaction, plot and training notes. Unfortunately those characters just weren't talking to me, even if a few references to LoXY! did sneak in here and there, like Ino's dad comparing Naruto's grin to Gai's and thanking the kami the kid didn't get assigned to him when he has that kind of untrained talent at being blindingly sparkly.
Gah, I've said it before, I'll say it again, I suck at porn... I set out planning to write mindless magically-transgendered sex and end up with a few sprinkles of heat over a big chunk of plot and character development. Jiraya would be ashamed of me.
The next day: Okay, now I see where my porn-writing skills failed, it was in having the insert-kyuubi make early contact with naruto, instead of letting it go to have first contact when Jiraya throws Naruto off a cliff, and meaningful dialogue not occur until the timeskip... because the best parts of the story are earlier, but by touching on things before N is old enough physically let alone emotionally to participate it neccessitates plot and character story elements. Yes, I know, I should have seen that from the beginning. D'oh. The thing is, I LIKE the way the story is shaping up in my notes, letting the Mothra Effect run wild without worrying about what it will mean down the road, because I now know that what was coming down the road sucked anyway. It's like the Butterfly Effect, only much, much bigger! To say it bluntly: If a butterfly flapping its wings in Tokyo can cause a hurricane in San Franciso, what happens when Mothra attacks?
[small]Kyuubi-dooby-doo![/small]
--
"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows