Well updates to machine spirit are also welcome. It seems a bit more polished than the previous version so that's good.
I did have to look up who Millie Jackson was though, didn't remember it offhand. Then again some puzelment is good, but not if you feel like you should recognize the name. Either give a hint that the name is fake or give a hint that the reader shouldn't know the name.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."
I did have to look up who Millie Jackson was though, didn't remember it offhand. Then again some puzelment is good, but not if you feel like you should recognize the name. Either give a hint that the name is fake or give a hint that the reader shouldn't know the name.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."