Quote:It means, that particular title has no place among the others mentioned. It's subpar, when compared to the rest of the names on that list. Worse than that when compared to BGAvatar and BGZone. Someone should throw this guy to the prereaders - he needs it. More importantly, his writing needs it. Or he just needs his writing to mature with time and experience. I remember writing like that when I started a couple of years ago, though I'd like to think I had at least a rudimentary grasp of punctuation and tenses back then.
okay ... what is this suppose to mean???
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Quote:*scritchscritch* You know, I can see a number of people here reading this bit and going 'so what am I, chopped liver?'
Sorry. I was sort of aiming this at Greiver, hoping against hope that he would do it ... being a fanfic writer and all.
I seriously doubt you'd get a 'no' if you gave the request its own thread. We're pretty much starved for text at any given time of the day, I think.
As for the stories, I've gone through Chrysalis. You should practice what you preach.
Stories with a lot of characters are difficult for me to keep track of. I tend to focus on two or three of the characters and only read over the rest later ...
If you're uncomfortable with reading this, you shouldn't try to force yourself into _writing_ it. Technically speaking, though, the writing is pretty good. Congratulations, you've got a better grasp of the written word than 90% of the fanfic community.
On an unrelated note, a single emote is usually enough. More just make you look like you want to jump out and CAPSLOCK someone. You might want to consider toning down on them.
-Griever
When tact is required, use brute force. When force is required, use greater force.
When the greatest force is required, use your head. Surprise is everything. - The Book of Cataclysm