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The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft
Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft
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Well I can't say I'm enamoured of the title, but other than that it seems ok.
Naruto's behavior still seems off though.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."
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Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft - by CattyNebulart - 11-08-2006, 05:42 AM
Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft - by CattyNebulart - 11-08-2006, 06:54 AM
Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft - by CattyNebulart - 11-08-2006, 07:33 AM

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