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The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft
Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft
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Title, yeah. Picked it for the overarching theme in general. That, and I liked the idea of a journey metaphor for all the individual chapter headings. Of course, it's still subject to change, if there's something better.
As for Naruto...hm, well, I gotta think about that. It's a concern if he's...too left of centre or something.
I mean, y'know, it's a Naruto fic, he's the title character. Admittedly, his lines in this chapter are pretty much fluff - hell, the 'I'm gonna win' rant is a riff on Starlight Express...but I've got some pretty major stuff planned for him later in the story.
So...I can live with a portrayal that's not exactly spot-on, but if he's coming off totally wrong, then that worries me. Gotta think about majorly tweaking those lines, perhaps.
-- Acyl
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Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft - by CattyNebulart - 11-08-2006, 05:42 AM
Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft - by CattyNebulart - 11-08-2006, 06:54 AM
Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft - by Acyl - 11-08-2006, 07:20 AM
Re: The Narrow Gate (Naruto Fic) - Chapter 1 complete draft - by CattyNebulart - 11-08-2006, 07:33 AM

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