blackaeronaut:
anowack:
Regarding characterisation... that's good to hear. Naruto, though...hm, yeah. I'm beginning to agree, the lines really aren't quite right. That definitely needs a rewrite. I think I've been stretching his character a little too far just to accomodate the jokes, and that ain't fair to the guy.
The pervert thing...was there largely as a nod to the fact, in canon, Naruto always calls his teachers perverts. But...he's got better reason there. And he doesn't call Iruka a pervert, so it isn't even a hard rule. I'll likely keep SkyeFire's Sadie-Hawkinist bit, but drop the other 'pervert-sensei' references.
Interestingly...Naruto probably gets Kabuto. To a degree. I mean, Kabuto yanks people around and plays mind games. So does Naruto, in a way. Naruto's the Leaf's number one prankster and unpredictable ninja, after all.
-- Acyl
Quote:I believe in happy endings. If you can't get those in fiction...then where the hell can you? Of course, even though the story ends well...or mostly well...doesn't mean there ain't gonna be troubles for our heroes along the way.
Looks like rough times are ahead for Team 7. Not to say that this is a bad fic - quite the contrary, it's looking very good, indeed. That said, I wonder if these three are going to learn something about teamwork and solidarity, and maybe, hopefully, something about family as well. That seems to be what they all need at this point.
anowack:
Quote:Yeah, I think you're right. Thanks. My grammar can get a bit dodgy in places.
Should be "All she had were the standard jutsu." I believe.
Quote:Kabuto uses some sort of cloaking jutsu in the anime (can't recall if it shows up in the manga), during the Forest of Death bit of the chuunin exam. It turns him into a blurred outline...'Predator'-style invisibility. If it's a physical light-bending gimmick...maybe it does blind the user, but I figure fighting blind isn't a big problem for an elite jounin. In any case...for my purposes, Kabuto has a few ways of doing the vanishing trick...and will teach one to Naruto at some point, for a minor plot reason.
I'd think a genjutsu version would be more useful, since without some extra jutsubabble one would think an actual physical invisibility would also blind the user.
Quote:Itachi.
Wonder what the heck happened to trigger him getting the Sharingan earlier than in canon.
Quote:A deliberate change, yeah. She's a latchkey kid, here. We don't really know much about Sakura's family background in canon, though early in the series she does allude to her parents, hinting that they're the controlling sort with expectations. This is...y'know, a different direction.
assuming that her mother dying in this timeline is a result of one of the other changes you've made and not an independent change.
Regarding characterisation... that's good to hear. Naruto, though...hm, yeah. I'm beginning to agree, the lines really aren't quite right. That definitely needs a rewrite. I think I've been stretching his character a little too far just to accomodate the jokes, and that ain't fair to the guy.
The pervert thing...was there largely as a nod to the fact, in canon, Naruto always calls his teachers perverts. But...he's got better reason there. And he doesn't call Iruka a pervert, so it isn't even a hard rule. I'll likely keep SkyeFire's Sadie-Hawkinist bit, but drop the other 'pervert-sensei' references.
Interestingly...Naruto probably gets Kabuto. To a degree. I mean, Kabuto yanks people around and plays mind games. So does Naruto, in a way. Naruto's the Leaf's number one prankster and unpredictable ninja, after all.
-- Acyl