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My first attempt of IST fanfic
Re: Thanks, teachs.
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Well since Drogn hasn't continued yet I'll take a crack at it, even though my english is farily bad too. Overall you did a fairly good job though.

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No, but it doesnt mean anything.
I think this might be "No, but that doesn't mean anything."
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It was true, being the suspect clearly metahuman in nature his dangerousness could not be estimated clearly.
I'm fairly sure dangerousness is not a word.
That was true, the subject, being clearly metahuman in nature, could not be evaluated clearly.
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Wait, lets see what he does, before. He could have been an harmless prankster, after all.
Wait, let's aee what he does." He could just be a harmless prankster, after all.
It feels somewht odd to have Rocambole be about to charge in and then decide against it.
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Shouted him Franco.
Shouted Franco.

No waranties on my correctness, not a native speaker myself, and languages always give me trouble.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."
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My first attempt of IST fanfic - by Luca Nicolai - 05-24-2006, 06:59 PM
Correct me, please! - by Luca Nicolai - 05-25-2006, 03:08 PM
Re: My first attempt of IST fanfic - by Ebony - 05-25-2006, 10:35 PM
Thanks, teachs. - by Luca Nicolai - 05-26-2006, 11:53 AM
Re: Thanks, teachs. - by CattyNebulart - 05-26-2006, 04:17 PM
Story - by Rev Dark - 05-26-2006, 08:50 PM
Re: Story - by Deadpan29 - 05-26-2006, 09:58 PM
Re: Story - by Luca Nicolai - 05-26-2006, 11:28 PM

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