I'll give the same feedback here as I did on Jec's page:
Nice chapter. A little less "we're evil nasty people who want to mess up Harry's life because we're EEEEEEEEEEEVVVVIIIIIIILLLLLL" overhandedness would be nicer.--
Christopher Angel, aka JPublic
The Works of Christopher Angel
Nice chapter. A little less "we're evil nasty people who want to mess up Harry's life because we're EEEEEEEEEEEVVVVIIIIIIILLLLLL" overhandedness would be nicer.--
Christopher Angel, aka JPublic
The Works of Christopher Angel