Dead Bang random thought

[Necratoid]

Okay, two things bugged me when I read this. 1) random quotation marks pop up (listed below): .. and 2) the formatting of the last scene is a bit jarring as
Makato is playing peanut gallery without a scene transition... its readable and all, but just seems off. I think its because its changing perspective so much.
If it stayed with Lisa's perspective and then went through Makato's perspective it would have flowed better. That or had scene transition brakes/page
brake/etc... between the perspective changes.

-Scene "Monday, October 26, 2037, 8:00 PM " ten paragraphs up from the bottom the paragraph ends in an unneeded quotation mark as the same speaker is
still speaking. (pods instead.")

-Scene "Wednesday, October 28, 2037, 11:00 AM" paragraph 10 quotation mars don't close at scene transition ("This might actually work.)

-Scene "Wednesday, October 28, 2037, 11:00 AM" Quote fail to close on the last line of scene.

-Scene "9:00 PM, GENOM Tower, Megatokyo" missing quotation: at paragraph 5, ("Well, Kate began,)

That and I'm waiting for a certain someone to get IDed on their upcoming job... the command staff having watched the series and all.