Quote:ClassicDrogn wrote:Oh god, if only you knew how close you are to what's coming down the pipeline...
Hmm, useful skills?
PiccoloRyoko: DOOODGE!
Mihoshi: Oops!
Washuu: Now if I just tweak this a bit...
Quote:Deadpan29 wrote:Quote:ClassicDrogn wrote:This
(looks back over story) Wait, Kiyone is dead? What? You... you monster... P_P
appears to be the OAV continuity. In this contiuity, Kiyone is the
name of Tenchi's mother, who passed away when he was little.
Galaxy police woman Kiyone is from the TV continuity as is Tenchi's mother being named Achika Masaki.
Quote:ordnance11 wrote:
Wasn't Tenchi's mother Achika? And Kiyone was Mihoshi's partner?
Quote:ECSNorway wrote:Pretty much what Deadpan, Rob, and Norway said.
Tenchi's mother being Achika is from one of the movies, which is technically in the 'Tenchi Universe' timeline.
Kiyone as Mihoshi's partner is also from 'Tenchi Universe'.
I admit that I myself was a bit confused on the matter, given that I had no idea that the movie Achika appeared in was actually part of the Tenchi Universe/In Tokyo Continuity.
You see, there's really several continuities going on here. First and foremost, you have the OVA series - three OVA's that culminated in Tenchi is God; all further arguments are invalidated!
In the OVA continuity, his mother's name is actually Kiyone Masaki. She is not to be confused with Kiyone Makibi, who only exists in the Tenchi Universe/In Tokyo series. (There are also other subtle differences, such as Ryoko is not Washu's daughter, Washu is not a Goddess in disguise, etc.)
The Universe/In Tokyo series are more mundane. There are no Goddesses running around (with the possible exception of Tsunami and even then her relationship with Sasami is much different) and the girls are really nothing special in the grand fabric of the universe. Just regular princesses, pirates, cops, and mad scientists from other planets.
Of note: the Manga continuity stems from the OVA series... but veers off course from the point after OVA2. We do get an outcome similar to OVA3, but Tokimi isn't involved in the Manga version. That said... there is A LOT! of great story material in the manga series - so much that I am sorely tempted to include it. It won't take much futzing around to make it happen, and the Manga's climax would make a great precursor to OVA3 (and also all the more reason for Seto to sic Noike on them - 'dem darn chilluns need sum suparvisin'). The only drawback is the A LOT! part. It would make for a saga all unto itself. Thoughts?
Quote:ClassicDrogn wrote:Might happen. But I have something else in mind... it would probably even distract Washu from making any robots and has to do with including the manga storylines. What would you say if Garrick started down the path of becoming a master swordsmith?
And, I wasn't really talking about your SI's shlep to Macross, just
fanboying after you got me actively thinking about it again. Are there
any mecha toys or (especially) kits in your/his gear, or mod-and-fly
games like Armored Core or the Artdink Gundam and Macross games? Washuu
getting the idea that you'd be interested in acting as
understudy/assistant while she builds a robot (possibly one which turns
into a vehicle as discussed, or like the Gadgetmobile and able to change
between several vehicle forms for different roles) two would qualify as
picking up a useful skill.
Quote:Bluemage wrote:LOL!!! Coming from someone that is also writing an SI I'm loving? High praise indeed. Don't worry, I'll be posting more later. I need to pace this stuff so I can keep up regular posts - my buffer won't last long.
Add me to the list of People Who Enjoy What You're Making. Maybe underline my name a few times.
It's got a definite Sleeping With The Girls
flavor, but you've already made the differences show up rather nicely.
Also, starting off with a transition while driving? I approve. ^^
As
far as writing quality goes, it's well-constructed, fun to read, and
easy to visualize. I feel like Washuu is a touch too accommodating- she
hasn't really tried to tease or scare the SI yet, which is odd- but
that might just be her being in serious-mode the whole time. Can't
really find anything else to offer potentially-constructive criticism
on, so I'll just sit here and wait for the next bit of it.
/does his best imitation of a begging puppy, looking forlornly at the screen
Yeah, Washu just feels that messing around with him too much would be like kicking a lost, starving puppy. Literally. So she's being gentle with him until she feels he's recovered enough to mess around with him. Of course, once she does start she'll come to find that Garrick, unlike Tenchi, will rise to the occasion and meet her with his own antics. It's gonna be fun to see how she reacts when he has his first full-blown ADHD-mood-swing in their presence.
Also, I'm glad to know that it is easy to visualize - it's something that I've been striving for in my writing and not always easy to pull off. I hate having to rework something, and sometimes the muse has me just so that I have to get the dialogue down ASAP and then work on everything else later. (-_-
(That's pretty much what happened here. Great monologue! Now what do I do with it!?)As for the Sleeping With The Girls you mentioned... It really comes as no surprise, since the original Brothers Grimm story was in reaction to ATC's most epic and dearly loved fic (we can only pray he finds the time and inspiration to finish it). And this 'solo-run' is basically what it says on the tin - instead of all the brothers, just one on his own.
And in all honesty, I think part of the reason why this story is standing up so well on its own is because the protagonist feeling so desperately alone. For one thing, Garrick wouldn't have felt nearly so bad about his situation if he did have his brothers with him, even as much as they annoy him. And for another, I think that sort of lonesome feeling really speaks to us as people deep down in our cores - the idea of being cut off from everyone and everything we once knew, and more than likely not being able to go back.
It's a very frightening proposition. And I seem to be very well equipped to convey that feeling. (Much to my surprise, believe me!) I guess this is mostly due to my own experiences with childhood depression and in dealing with isolation - even among my own family! My dad would hold me to a brutally higher standard than any of my younger siblings and it isolated me from everyone else, even though I would sit with everyone at the dinner table. Mom considers it a miracle I never did anything horribly self-destructive like experimenting with drugs or alcohol or start cutting myself. At this point, being ADHD is actually a blessing because you have moments where you can say to yourself, 'Screw this, I'm gonna have some fun and damn the consequences.' Maybe not so concisely, but you get the idea.
And really, that's part of what's going to happen to Garrick a few times over the course of his stay in Tenchi-verse - the ADHD part of him is gonna overcome his depression, and then things will get very interesting.
Quote:Bob Schroeck wrote:....... D'OH!I hate it when I make that mix up. I'll fix it in the final draft, I promise! orzQuote:“Because, you adorable little imp, shonen manga is not how real relationships work.”I remembered this while shoveling snow a couple hours ago. You mean shojo. Otherwise she's tricking Ryoko and Ayeka into taking relationship advice from stuff like Dragonball Z. (Which, come to think of it, would explain a lot.)
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Coming up next chapter, Ayeka meets Garrick's Special Friend!http://1.bp.blogspot.com/_ln1DgogO5I8/T ... CN6114.JPG
NOTE: this post delayed due to Internet outage in my area. :p