Protagonist. Type. Bastard. Go rescue an alien girlfriend or something, so you're too busy to keep making the rest of us look bad.
Sort of a transition chapter feel to this one, though meeting Funaho is of course an important milestone. I did notice one technical problem - "marshal ability" should be "martial." I'd worry about introducing foreign species to Jurai, but all things considered their trees can probably take care of themselves against mundane Earth plants, particularly one that's not all that prolific in spreading itself.
It might do to turn the narration about your SI's talent at swords into an actual scene, to break up the slower paced slice of life stuff, but not strictly necessary at this stage. Putting in some kind of action soon is probably a good idea, though.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows
Sort of a transition chapter feel to this one, though meeting Funaho is of course an important milestone. I did notice one technical problem - "marshal ability" should be "martial." I'd worry about introducing foreign species to Jurai, but all things considered their trees can probably take care of themselves against mundane Earth plants, particularly one that's not all that prolific in spreading itself.
It might do to turn the narration about your SI's talent at swords into an actual scene, to break up the slower paced slice of life stuff, but not strictly necessary at this stage. Putting in some kind of action soon is probably a good idea, though.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows