(02-22-2018, 09:26 PM)Mamorien Wrote: Travolore is rewriting the first five chapters of Star Wars: Bare Squadron (which were originally the result of RP between three or four other deviants) to have a consistent writing style (his, as Chapter 6 is presumably where-when he took over) and smooth over some of the narrative curves. I've seen the outline, and those five chapters have expanded to eight, which he says he'll start posting to dA tomorrow. Tonight, he's given us a prologue (a vinculum to the Her Perfect Existence story I mentioned late in the previous thread), and it's a lot like the prologue to Rogue One, except that he says things will get somewhat lighter and softer once the Special Editions start in earnest.
https://travolore.deviantart.com/art/Sta...-729664865
Warning: contains a singular naked child event, plus horribly creative use of an Inquisitorial lightsaber.
The revised Chapter 1 (covering roughly the first half of the original version) is up:
https://www.deviantart.com/art/Star-Wars...-732033644
Warning: Kara is still naked, and a couple of other characters get non-consensually stripped. Gratuitous Shyriiwook. Gratuitous-but-not-unwarranted arm-ripping Wookiee Fu. Plenty of blood, at least four breasts, and enough Wookiees and T'doshok to technically fill the beast quota. Joe Bob says check it out.