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[RFC] Going Native. (With Edits)
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits)
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Actually, now that I think about it, that scene could probably be chopped too and re-arranged to a later part.  Then expanded with two additional parts to actually bring the story to a point.

I think this basically cut the wrodcount in half. More than in half. To get to the same place
Oh sweet meteor of death
Fall upon us.
Deliver us in fire
To Peace everlasting.
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[RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 09-19-2018, 05:39 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 10-01-2018, 02:30 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 10-01-2018, 05:08 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 10-04-2018, 04:46 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 12-08-2019, 06:28 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 12-09-2019, 06:35 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 12-09-2019, 06:49 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 12-10-2019, 05:49 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 12-11-2019, 07:17 PM
RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits) - by Dartz - 12-13-2019, 03:15 PM

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