[Story][Short][IC][Arc 1] Butterflies and Hurricanes

[robkelk]

I've had the advantage of pre-reading this part, so I'll confine myself to a couple of errors - one mine, one BA's. Starting with mine:

Mikoto could only barely grasp the concept. She had rarely ever felt true hunger, and the times she did was when she missed a meal because of circumstances beyond her control coming to play.

My error because I didn't catch it in prereading. Mikoto did willingly go without food by choice while she was destroying cloning labs during Railgun S - which was the only reason she didn't throw up the first time she fought ITEM.

fowl remarks

"Remarkable bird, the Norwegian Blue, idn'it, ay? Beautiful plumage! "

fowl/foul