[OOC][PLOT][ARC 1] Planning for Season 1 - The Retcon

[robkelk]

Okay, second draft of the Risky/Safety + SI story is done.  It's probably good enough for feedback now, so please other writers, please review it on the wiki.

(Second draft implies I at least read the thing once and made changes based on what I read.  First draft is not a thing I share anywhere, typically)

I'll move on to the next section, now that I've written a story no one knew we needed.

* robkelk sets that section aside for a day without reading the changes as they come in

* robkelk reads that section as a whole, a day later

* robkelk corrects one grammatical error ("She has thick ponytail" to "She had a thick ponytail")

* robkelk adds a footnote about the casual use of office supplies


Looking good, even despite - or because of - the swings in the mood of the interview. I think you have the interviewers in character, and there's a good amount of overall plot information delivered in the scene.