Morgan raises a...very interesting point. I hadn't considered that angle at all, but it makes perfect sense. All part of the plan.
Unlike most folks here, though, it seems like I disagree about the cliffhanger. I liked it. I thought it was a great end to the chapter.
Now, okay, sure, some part of me was unhappy to see the chapter end there - but that, for me, was just the standard disappointment of reading any piece of incomplete fiction. The whole I want more factor, yeah?
But besides that...thing is, though...I wouldn't call it a really sadistic cliffhanger. It's not like there's any mystery what's gonna happen next, see? Because we know, we just know, that our boy Paradox is gonna be opening a metric ton of cosmic whoop-ass. Somehow.
In the meantime, he gets to have this utterly and completely cool moment.
And we know whatever happens next, it will be awesome.
I think that whole final sequence did an excellent job of leading up to that dramatic climax. Well done, guys.
See, I liked OMB. I found it an enjoyable piece of fanfiction, and very amusing. But I never had that sense of really rooting for Paradox as a character. I think what this chapter - and all the chapters leading to it - really did was sell the nature of his character really well.
I think that's what really impresses me here. It's not just Paradox; we've gotten to see facets of Doug we didn't in DWII. I dunno about Urd, necessarily, but Belldandy, Skuld and Mara have been spotlit really well too. Even Megumi and Keiichi...that whole scene with him refusing to leave Belldandy was just epic. I mean, that kind of thing is a consistent theme for his character in the canon material, but the execution - and the eminently suitable quote in the dialogue - was excellent execution.
This is very good, very solid characterisation.
-- Acyl
Unlike most folks here, though, it seems like I disagree about the cliffhanger. I liked it. I thought it was a great end to the chapter.
Now, okay, sure, some part of me was unhappy to see the chapter end there - but that, for me, was just the standard disappointment of reading any piece of incomplete fiction. The whole I want more factor, yeah?
But besides that...thing is, though...I wouldn't call it a really sadistic cliffhanger. It's not like there's any mystery what's gonna happen next, see? Because we know, we just know, that our boy Paradox is gonna be opening a metric ton of cosmic whoop-ass. Somehow.
In the meantime, he gets to have this utterly and completely cool moment.
And we know whatever happens next, it will be awesome.
I think that whole final sequence did an excellent job of leading up to that dramatic climax. Well done, guys.
See, I liked OMB. I found it an enjoyable piece of fanfiction, and very amusing. But I never had that sense of really rooting for Paradox as a character. I think what this chapter - and all the chapters leading to it - really did was sell the nature of his character really well.
I think that's what really impresses me here. It's not just Paradox; we've gotten to see facets of Doug we didn't in DWII. I dunno about Urd, necessarily, but Belldandy, Skuld and Mara have been spotlit really well too. Even Megumi and Keiichi...that whole scene with him refusing to leave Belldandy was just epic. I mean, that kind of thing is a consistent theme for his character in the canon material, but the execution - and the eminently suitable quote in the dialogue - was excellent execution.
This is very good, very solid characterisation.
-- Acyl