Hm... some critique:
I think Happery is leaning a little too hard into the Christian elements in general. I get that she's supposed to be the crazy fundamentalist but even the wackier types currently serving OTL are capable of couching their terms in ways that don't make them out as total nutjobs 90% of the time. For example:
On the subject of the reaction, while it's really goddamned satisfying to read it could also get dialed back a little. The Disney, Warner/DC and tech bloc stuff hit pretty hard as it is, some of the more minor protests could get cut as needed. Also, choose one of two pullquotes for the firestorm:
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I think Happery is leaning a little too hard into the Christian elements in general. I get that she's supposed to be the crazy fundamentalist but even the wackier types currently serving OTL are capable of couching their terms in ways that don't make them out as total nutjobs 90% of the time. For example:
Quote:Distributing paper copies of the Act to the reporters there, Happery proudly declared that it would "permanently cripple the Fen and their efforts to recruit good Christian youngsters to their unholy cause".A better quote would be something like "this act will protect our nation from the threat of international terrorism and significantly damage the terrorists' efforts to recruit impressionable young Americans." Dogwhistling is an art, and fundamentalist politicians are very good at it. Even the crazy ones. Likewise, most of her Satanic conspiracy theory madness is... well, it feels wrong. I wouldn't be surprised to find that somebody believes that space travel is a lie cooked up by Satan, but I'd be very surprised if they were willing to share that publicly and get elected, even in the reddest of red districts. A lot of what Happery starts going off on in the later phases of the counter-reaction is stuff that ought not to have gotten her elected in the first place. She needs to get dialed back a little, make the conspiracy less openly about Satan and more about the Fen and "liberal Hollywood bigwigs" and so forth. Which, y'know, isn't that far from the truth.
On the subject of the reaction, while it's really goddamned satisfying to read it could also get dialed back a little. The Disney, Warner/DC and tech bloc stuff hit pretty hard as it is, some of the more minor protests could get cut as needed. Also, choose one of two pullquotes for the firestorm:
Quote:"The Subversive Literature Act is the greatest act of political self-immolation in American history. Never before has a politician destroyed herself so thoroughly so quickly for so little." --Momo von Satan, Earth-Fen Relations: A History of Bullshit
Quote:"The entertainment industry is the last realm in which the US still holds unquestioned dominance. As they used to say back on the farm, 'you fuck with the bull, you get the horns.'" --Gen. Mal Fnord, VVSMr. Fnord interdimensional man of mystery
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