Looks like there's some formatting problems in the first mish offer dialogue - no spaces between some sentences, after the full-stop.
Most of the character bios aren't complete sentences or properly punctuated. Granted, that might be intentional, but it's still jarring to me. 'course, I'm probably fussier about that than most people. It's the editor in me showing. =P
A lot of the NPC speech is missing minor punctuation as well. Namely, many lines aren't capped with a period.
I suppose I might be nitpicking here. But for me, when I'm enjoying an arc, it's always the LITTLE problems that stand out more, y'know?
Otherwise, I quite enjoyed this. Mind, I'm currently living in the country this thing lovingly riffs off, so I'm probably closer to the subject material than most. But honestly...the whole premise was terribly amusing, and all the dialogue incredibly well written. I had a good laugh at a particular parody boss in the final mission, especially since I didn't get the joke in his name until he was almost down. At which point I actually laughed.
Five stars from me, on sheer amusement value and originality alone, though there are those small issues of polish that I mentioned.
-- Acyl
Most of the character bios aren't complete sentences or properly punctuated. Granted, that might be intentional, but it's still jarring to me. 'course, I'm probably fussier about that than most people. It's the editor in me showing. =P
A lot of the NPC speech is missing minor punctuation as well. Namely, many lines aren't capped with a period.
I suppose I might be nitpicking here. But for me, when I'm enjoying an arc, it's always the LITTLE problems that stand out more, y'know?
Otherwise, I quite enjoyed this. Mind, I'm currently living in the country this thing lovingly riffs off, so I'm probably closer to the subject material than most. But honestly...the whole premise was terribly amusing, and all the dialogue incredibly well written. I had a good laugh at a particular parody boss in the final mission, especially since I didn't get the joke in his name until he was almost down. At which point I actually laughed.
Five stars from me, on sheer amusement value and originality alone, though there are those small issues of polish that I mentioned.
-- Acyl