Fixes:
she wasn't a pre- metamorphosis Deep One. -> Extra space.
They were in a little room which Kat had called an "elevator". Luna could feel it moving downward, which made complete sense given the name, and deduced that it also moved upward. The concept of a room that moved from place to place was an intriguing one, and it struck her as far more efficient than moving staircases -> The ministry has elevators, and I would be surprised in she hadn't been there once with her father for something press-related.
Not fixes:
I love your Luna. And go for her.
-People may die, but ideas are forever. Je suis Charlie.
she wasn't a pre- metamorphosis Deep One. -> Extra space.
They were in a little room which Kat had called an "elevator". Luna could feel it moving downward, which made complete sense given the name, and deduced that it also moved upward. The concept of a room that moved from place to place was an intriguing one, and it struck her as far more efficient than moving staircases -> The ministry has elevators, and I would be surprised in she hadn't been there once with her father for something press-related.
Not fixes:
I love your Luna. And go for her.
-People may die, but ideas are forever. Je suis Charlie.