Bob Schroeck Wrote:vorticity Wrote:Why is there a Minako-kai? I now have this image of a row of men in suits bowing before Boss Mina-ojou-chan vowing to protect her honor.
Why is there a Minato-kai? Because there is a Sumiyoshi-kai in the real world, and that's what they were called when they were founded in 1958.
Um, I asked about a Minako-kai... you know what, never mind.
Anyway, I do like storyline derailment, even if it means not having a fight in Tokyo's famous Sagrada Família. That's the best part about fanfic, asking "what if?" and heading on an entirely different path.
Maybe there hasn't been a lot of response because the chapter was kind of what we expected from you, based on previous steps and the advance scenes: Doug arrives in alternate Tokyo, sets up a job for himself, we are introduced to the cast of characters, and Doug makes his first subtle alteration to the plot. Actually, the most unusual thing is that Doug found the center of the story[1] pretty much first thing, and got a lot of exposition out of the way very quickly. Most of the time he's fumbling around the setting trying to put all of the pieces together, but somehow he's managed to bypass all of that this time. I will probably miss that, as Doug's awkwardness around a setting that the reader knows better than he is a signature part of your writing style. And it's super funny.
[1]: The one leading to the many is Tsukino Usagi. Usagi is the one.
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