So, Geoff...
Mitsuwa? I thought you liked dinner there that one time!
And boy does Deadpool remind me of someone, but I can't put my finger on precisely who...
All seriousness aside, great job. A good, fun read, the pacing worked for me, and the appearance/identity of Sister Destiny was a kick. Oddly, I had some issues at first with the specific divine guest appearances in the story, and then I sat back and essentially said to myself, "Hey, Belldandy et al. are okay in UF, but he isn't? That's just a little inconsistent, isn't it?" So I slapped myself around a little and went back to enjoying the story.
-- Bob
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...The President is on the line
As ninety-nine crab rangoons go by...
Mitsuwa? I thought you liked dinner there that one time!
And boy does Deadpool remind me of someone, but I can't put my finger on precisely who...
All seriousness aside, great job. A good, fun read, the pacing worked for me, and the appearance/identity of Sister Destiny was a kick. Oddly, I had some issues at first with the specific divine guest appearances in the story, and then I sat back and essentially said to myself, "Hey, Belldandy et al. are okay in UF, but he isn't? That's just a little inconsistent, isn't it?" So I slapped myself around a little and went back to enjoying the story.
-- Bob
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...The President is on the line
As ninety-nine crab rangoons go by...