Okay.
I've read this chapter and, while the writing is of very good quality I have to say that it is a bit, nay a lot, slow. I guess I'm just not the audience for it but reading about Doug and Skuld and Megumi geeking out over the fictional specifications of Doug's fictional flying motorcycle... are boring to me. My eyes keep glazing over.
The character interactions are good. Though I'm kind of hoping something happens soon. Something actiony. I can see that this might not be an action kind of series, but my inner action fan craves it. Oh well.
Though I find myself kind of mystified by Doug's yo-yo relationship with the Norns et al. But its a good kind of mystified. Its a "how is Doug going to reconcile these two opposing viewpoints in his mind" not a "this makes no sense" mystified. I like it.
I hate to say it, but I don't really care about Chris, as a character. Not that I dislike him, just that I don't really find myself thinking about him. He's like a person I know I'm supposed to care about, but don't. It might not hurt that I read Oh, My Brother!... years and years ago. I just can't get a handle of the character. Was that ever "finished" or is this basically it?
In contrast, I actually really like your version of Megumi. Good work making me care about a character from the manga I actually didn't like much at all.
The Norns I run hot and cold on. I hate Belldandy, and always will. She is exactly the kind of female stereotype character Japan has produced that I find personally repugnant. So I don't think, unless you do something major, I'm going to warm up to her (or Keiichi the wonderwuss) anytime soon. On the other hand Skuld and Urd could be interesting characters if handled well. I'm surprised with how little you've done with urd, however. And Skuld... well, I'll withhold judgement until I see where your going with that next chapter.
Overall, I think this fic is good. It probably isn't exactly my cup of tea, from the looks of it. Unless the drama or the action really begins to ramp up next chapter. I can't really offer any advice, because most of my complaints are personal taste issues.
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Epsilon
I've read this chapter and, while the writing is of very good quality I have to say that it is a bit, nay a lot, slow. I guess I'm just not the audience for it but reading about Doug and Skuld and Megumi geeking out over the fictional specifications of Doug's fictional flying motorcycle... are boring to me. My eyes keep glazing over.
The character interactions are good. Though I'm kind of hoping something happens soon. Something actiony. I can see that this might not be an action kind of series, but my inner action fan craves it. Oh well.
Though I find myself kind of mystified by Doug's yo-yo relationship with the Norns et al. But its a good kind of mystified. Its a "how is Doug going to reconcile these two opposing viewpoints in his mind" not a "this makes no sense" mystified. I like it.
I hate to say it, but I don't really care about Chris, as a character. Not that I dislike him, just that I don't really find myself thinking about him. He's like a person I know I'm supposed to care about, but don't. It might not hurt that I read Oh, My Brother!... years and years ago. I just can't get a handle of the character. Was that ever "finished" or is this basically it?
In contrast, I actually really like your version of Megumi. Good work making me care about a character from the manga I actually didn't like much at all.
The Norns I run hot and cold on. I hate Belldandy, and always will. She is exactly the kind of female stereotype character Japan has produced that I find personally repugnant. So I don't think, unless you do something major, I'm going to warm up to her (or Keiichi the wonderwuss) anytime soon. On the other hand Skuld and Urd could be interesting characters if handled well. I'm surprised with how little you've done with urd, however. And Skuld... well, I'll withhold judgement until I see where your going with that next chapter.
Overall, I think this fic is good. It probably isn't exactly my cup of tea, from the looks of it. Unless the drama or the action really begins to ramp up next chapter. I can't really offer any advice, because most of my complaints are personal taste issues.
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Epsilon