Dartz, this has been combobulating in my head for a few days now, but I've only just managed to put it into words here.
What's the pay-off for this story? IMO it seems to just get darker and grimmer. Honestly? It seems to violate the spirit (if not the wording, I checked) of Rule 0, and that is worrying me.
Storywise:
Ben spilling the beans - This is something I think fits his character for jumping ahead, but there will have to be consequences for him/the Roughriders.
So yeah, not a good look there. Posibly contracts will get a bit stiffer, and him/his faction loose rep and influence.
The Senshi - The way the politics seems to be going, there is a rot in the parliament that will blow up soon. This could be the major consequence of all the events in story. I can easily see the other factions going "Hey, we've been helping keep a lid on this, but we can't spare the resources anymore so *sound of file being slapped on table* here's what we've got. We figure you've got six months before something happens that's loud enough to be public. Good Luck."
(Then they use the extra resource to keep a better lid on the actual problem.)
Jet - I'm gonna be honest here. Jet needs a good talking to, but if that fails I can only see A.C. (as Cyber-Doc of record) declaring her medically unfit for duty and pulling her in hard. Especially if she realises Jet's been abusing the booster-packs.
(The slightest bright spot I can see is A.C. going "Hello? No, she's still unfit to resume her duties. Deal with it yourself. <link terminated>"
This is all My Opinion Only.
(Danm, I feel horrible that this is the most I've written on Fenspace for years.
Sorry Dartz.
Sorry Gang.)
What's the pay-off for this story? IMO it seems to just get darker and grimmer. Honestly? It seems to violate the spirit (if not the wording, I checked) of Rule 0, and that is worrying me.
Storywise:
Ben spilling the beans - This is something I think fits his character for jumping ahead, but there will have to be consequences for him/the Roughriders.
Dialogue sample (not canon) Wrote:"Ben, talking to Anika will have consequences you know."
"I was trying to-"
"You DIDN'T. CONSULT. That's caused further issues to deal with. And it doesn't look good for you."
"Wha-?"
"If that's what you do to a supposed friend, what else?"
So yeah, not a good look there. Posibly contracts will get a bit stiffer, and him/his faction loose rep and influence.
The Senshi - The way the politics seems to be going, there is a rot in the parliament that will blow up soon. This could be the major consequence of all the events in story. I can easily see the other factions going "Hey, we've been helping keep a lid on this, but we can't spare the resources anymore so *sound of file being slapped on table* here's what we've got. We figure you've got six months before something happens that's loud enough to be public. Good Luck."
(Then they use the extra resource to keep a better lid on the actual problem.)
Jet - I'm gonna be honest here. Jet needs a good talking to, but if that fails I can only see A.C. (as Cyber-Doc of record) declaring her medically unfit for duty and pulling her in hard. Especially if she realises Jet's been abusing the booster-packs.
(The slightest bright spot I can see is A.C. going "Hello? No, she's still unfit to resume her duties. Deal with it yourself. <link terminated>"
This is all My Opinion Only.
(Danm, I feel horrible that this is the most I've written on Fenspace for years.
Sorry Dartz.
Sorry Gang.)