[IC][Story] Full Metal Boogie

[Labster]

Oh, this is great, BA.  Can't wait to see more.

Seconded.

That was really nice.  When I go back and write Sakura's arrival, I'm going to have to do the "introduce the rooms" thing too.

Longitude.  Nine.

Don't you mean niner?

“This is the plan,” said Ryouko as she rode in the back seat with Sousuke while Teletha had shotgun next to Ben.  “Washu gave me a portal device.  It’s one-time use only, though.”

“Only one time?” said Telehta in surprise.

“Washu’s good,” said Ryouko, “but even she can only cram so much power into a device this small and keep it stable.  Save the unstable shit for things that are supposed to go boom, ya know?”

Now you're thinking with port... wait a minute!  Hasn't... yep.  GLaDOS has been our setting since, well, before I joined.  Maybe Washu needs to have a little chat.

And now that I went back to find that section, I see Teletha is misspelled.

“Yeah, Belldandy went a little overboard when I asked for soundproofing and blast resistance charms.  You can literally set off a pipebomb in the next bedroom and you’ll hardly hear a thing.

I'm sure with Sagara staying here that will never come up, right?

And now that I went back to find that line, I notice it needs an ending quote mark.  Gosh, I didn't see anything when I was actually reading the thing.  I'm going to end this comment before I introduce any more errors retroactively.