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[Story][Short][IC][Arc 1] Butterflies and Hurricanes
RE: [Story][Short][IC][Arc 1] Butterflies and Hurricanes
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(08-12-2021, 07:01 AM)robkelk Wrote: I've had the advantage of pre-reading this part, so I'll confine myself to a couple of errors - one mine, one BA's. Starting with mine:

Quote:Mikoto could only barely grasp the concept.  She had rarely ever felt true hunger, and the times she did was when she missed a meal because of circumstances beyond her control coming to play.

My error because I didn't catch it in prereading. Mikoto did willingly go without food by choice while she was destroying cloning labs during Railgun S - which was the only reason she didn't throw up the first time she fought ITEM.

Okey dokey.  I'll rework that later before we post this to the Wiki.

(08-12-2021, 07:01 AM)robkelk Wrote:
Quote:fowl remarks
"Remarkable bird, the Norwegian Blue, idn'it, ay? Beautiful plumage! " Smile

fowl/foul

(08-12-2021, 09:10 AM)Bob Schroeck Wrote: Wow.

That's all I can say, other than to note:

Quote:Ryouko is my sparing partner these days.
Unless she routinely goes easy on him, that should be "sparring".  <grin>

Urgh.  And the really messed up part is that not even the Grammar Checker in MS Word would be likely to catch these goofs.  Thanks for spotting those.
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RE: [Story][Short][IC][Arc 1] Butterflies and Hurricanes - by Black Aeronaut - 08-12-2021, 09:14 AM

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