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[DRAFT/RFC] Vesta
 
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Quote:During the early days of Fen expansion into the Solar System, the [[Browncoats] and [[Heinleinians] argued over who was entitled to [[Ganymede], based on their fandoms' pre-handwave fiction. (The [[Fivers] eventually got the two groups to share.) The Asimov fen saw this, acted quickly to claim Vesta as their own, and built the first post-secondary educational institutions in space there: the '''Vesta Institute of Biochemistry''' and the '''Vesta Institute of Robotics''' teach the two scientific fields most associated with Prof. Asimov.

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Fans of Issac Asimov, watching the arguments between the [[Browncoats] and [[Heinleinians] over "ownership" of [[Ganymede], acted quickly to establish a claim on Vesta. They built the first post-secondary educational institutions in space, the '''Vesta Institute of Biochemistry''' and the '''Vesta Institute of Robotics''', the two fields of study most associated with Professor Asimov.

Quote:lead early Fen settlers to locate '''Novyi Petrovichi''' (Vesta's first permanent settlement) there.

should be "led," not "lead." Also, is Novyi Petrovichi a direct reference? Seems to me if they're going Russian for the name it should be Novyi Petrograd.
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[DRAFT/RFC] Vesta - by robkelk - 01-03-2010, 10:40 PM
[No subject] - by M Fnord - 01-04-2010, 04:08 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 01-04-2010, 04:14 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 01-04-2010, 04:30 AM

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