On the subject of the random Japanese, what does 'Nandaiyo' mean?
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just a bit of personal preference, but I find it a bit jarring when there are words in a different language placed in a fic, when there are adequate English translations for them. Words like 'nakama', or 'hitsuzen', or the honorifics lose some of their meanings or connotations when translated, so those make sense to keep, but words like 'nani', which directly translates to 'what', are better translated, in my opinion. It just doesn't make sense to me to randomly and inconsistently drop the translation convention in the middle of a scene. At one point, you have Usagi saying "Whaaaaat!", while in another, you have the senshi shout "Nani!" When I'm reading, and come across a word I don't recognize, I stop and look it up, which breaks the flow of the story, and makes it difficult to regain my immersion in the story.
Sorry about that. This kind of random language swap has always kinda bugged me. Thanks for writing though. Better than how I'm doing.
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Stand between the Silver Crystal and the Golden Sea.
"Youngsters these days just have no appreciation for the magnificence of the legendary cucumber." --Krityan Elder, Tales of Vesperia.
This is
just a bit of personal preference, but I find it a bit jarring when there are words in a different language placed in a fic, when there are adequate English translations for them. Words like 'nakama', or 'hitsuzen', or the honorifics lose some of their meanings or connotations when translated, so those make sense to keep, but words like 'nani', which directly translates to 'what', are better translated, in my opinion. It just doesn't make sense to me to randomly and inconsistently drop the translation convention in the middle of a scene. At one point, you have Usagi saying "Whaaaaat!", while in another, you have the senshi shout "Nani!" When I'm reading, and come across a word I don't recognize, I stop and look it up, which breaks the flow of the story, and makes it difficult to regain my immersion in the story.
Sorry about that. This kind of random language swap has always kinda bugged me. Thanks for writing though. Better than how I'm doing.
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Stand between the Silver Crystal and the Golden Sea.
"Youngsters these days just have no appreciation for the magnificence of the legendary cucumber." --Krityan Elder, Tales of Vesperia.