I did notice a couple of minor things on a second read - "distracted from my mussing" has an extra S, and your capitalization of "Imperial" is not always there. Otherwise, the things I wonder about are not things the Bolo would know, and hence out of the bounds of the story - where they are, what Nanoha and Signum are looking for, etc. It might be nice if the Bolo transmitted the picture of Signum beside it or in the cockpit or whatever - I seem to recall that die Wolkenritter had followed the same general program so many times, and been afflicted with data corrumption, to the point they didn't even remember how long it had been let alone anything that might have come before, so finding a literal relic of her own past would be nifty for Signum.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows