That said, the advice you've been given already is quite good, and I can still drop off my own standard package of "try to work in senses other than sight and sounds other than dialogue." The reek of scorched insulation like an ice pick to the sinuses when doing some repairs, the slightly sticky feel of the padding in a cockpit after generations of mechwarriors sweating out combat stress on top of ever present overheating issues, the solid whirr-thunk-crunch of the hatch closing, will all feed immersion.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows