Natural (A RWBY ficlet)

[Bob Schroeck]

As a vignette, it's fine, almost perfect. If you want to wrap a larger story around it, by all means do so, but it works very well as is.

Nitpicks:

Like your sister said, there's other options

"there're" or "there are" if you find the contraction clumsy.

"Lets make that everything

"Let's"

beginners form

Depending on exactly what you mean, "beginner" singular or "beginner's" possessive.
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.