Update Thread 28: Return of the Bride of the Son of Updates

[Bob Schroeck]

Pyeknu wrote:

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Nice little surprise:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5358187/17/Harsh-Reality
Next chapter of Harsh Reality (Harry Potter).

I finally read all of this, and while it's a nice WAFFy little plot, the writer is either very young or very inexperienced, as the narrative reads like a child was telling the story -- and not as an intentional stylistic choice.  The author also seems to think that punctuation is too expensive to waste money or time on, with apostrophes the worst of the lot.  Also, many many many word choice errors -- a bit more than I think you can account for by spellchecker barfs.  For example, that last chapter has a line that bounced me right out of the story with a bad word choice -- "It was still a little shocking that she was able to bread these special dogs". All I could think of was Marge dipping puppies in egg wash and dredging them in flour and breadcrumbs.
BTW, has anyone else noticed that FF.NET is running a script of some sort to prevent you from selecting and copying blocks of text on its pages?  I had to NoScript the site before I could copy that line I quoted, which then turned everything on the page into centered text.
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.