C&C: DWII/15 (MAY CONTAIN SPOILERS, YOUR OWN FAULT!)

[Bob Schroeck]

Wanderer said:

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Likewise, kudos. Excellent all around.

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Thank you.

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Do I remember correctly that Doug's middle name has not previously been mentioned?

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Not as such. He did use it as part of a quick pseudonym right in the first chapter, and the fact that his middle initial is Q has been known for a while. But I've been "hiding" his middle name until now. Because it would have given the whole thing away. As it was, either Logan Darklighter or Starranger figured it out anyway something like three years ago on the old Hostedscripts board.

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I shudder to think what's going to become of Lisa with the new Sailor thing. Especially if she has trouble figuring out how to change back.

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Nice of you to notice that. The transformation to is now something of a macro -- notice that she didn't consciously do anything except speak the trigger phrase -- but she's never de-transformed her clothing back.
And now she doesn't have handy-dandy Disintegrating Doug to help her get out of her ersatz Senshi outfit.
Let me just say that Sylia's either going to get a new technology or a very bad migraine out of the process of getting Lisa into some different clothes.

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you caught that turn of phrase just perfectly, it captures the feel of that cut-down-the-telephone-poles wings-opening scene from the book exactly right.

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Thanks, although I have to admit that I haven't read the book in quite a while, so I wasn't consciously emulating that scene.

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I have six errata, of varying degree, to point out; two are typos, three are phrasing suggestions and one is an error in source material. Should I post them here, or send them privately, or what?

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A separate thread here would be okay; I share my failures as well as my triumphs, you know.


-- Bob
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