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[OOC][PLOT] The Fifth Thread of Planning for Arc 1 - Arrivals
RE: [OOC][PLOT] The Fifth Thread of Planning for Arc 1 - Arrivals
(10-05-2019, 02:12 AM)Labster Wrote:
Quote: A close up of the pool where Ami, Teletha, and Rei Ayanami will earn the collective title, The Mermaids.
Aw, did someone forget to tell Kagura to bring a swimsuit?
Don't Kagura and Sakaki's costumes count as swimsuits? Smile


More seriously... D-Day minus 25 to Halloween story release.

Still to be done, by section, at minimum:


Preparation for the party

Quote:Mamoru, Chibi-Usa, Artemis, Luna, and Diana turning up at the Westwoods doorstep (possibly on their own, possibly brought by Sasami, Chidori, or both, possibly some other way). And are Hotaru and Setsuna with them, or are they still hiding in a bolthole with the opening pulled in behind them?

BA: "I'm going to need to throw in a few smaller bits myself - namely Ben conceiving the idea and pitching it to his residents before pitching it to the other apartment managers."

Rob: Maybe Mamoru &c. showing up is why Ben decides to hold a party?

Selling the party to the displacees


Quote:Inviting Dublin, LA, Montreal, and Pensacola, not necessarily in alphabetical order. Inviting Ottawa can go in the middle of the list, if desired.
Rajvik, Dartz, and Brent can write the Pensacola, Dublin, and L.A. invitation scenes, respectively. Rob will have to handle Montreal.


Lower priority: We need a better description of opening the portals to San Antonio. Currently, there's only one sentence. Somebody needs to turn this beige prose purple.


Quote:Describe a party room and its decorations here
Since Brent thinks 28C is too hot. This gives BA a chance to describe an apartment decorated for Halloween.


Trick-or-treating & Party setup

Quote:Trick or treaters get ready to head out
describe the whole party
(Rob: Is this still necessary, with the return parade describing everyone?)


Quote:"Trick or Treat!" at $house.
To describe the neighbourhood and show that not everything this evening is weird or earthshaking. Pick a house.


The Party

This section needs a dozen or so short scenes to separate the longer sections, along the lines of what somebody would overhear when walking to or from the buffet. A few before the trick-or-treaters' return, most after they're back. Use these to establish people are at the party. (Brent, your PM idea can be one of these.)


The trick-or-treaters' return march needs to be brought out of Draft status.


Quote:Nanoha and Fate had just arrived on Ben's heels because the Takamachis followed them in their own car.


Quote:Sakura and Shaoran are both electric magic users. They'd probably both appreciate a demonstration of things you can do with electricity from people who are better at it.
Rob gets this one, since most of the mages and magical girls are in Canada.


Quote:Sakura would be happy to learn magic from anyone, and she's a quick learner. Minako becoming interested in Rin's gem magic. Bling as arsenal?
Or at least as power boosters.


Quote:Mikoto and Sosuke express an interest in going up against each other in a mock combat. They ask "why not now?" Ben vetoes doing it outside where the neighbors can hear explosions and lightning bolts, Rob vetoes live ammo, Washuu offers a holosuite "danger room".
Rob gets this one. Even if it kills him.


The After-Party - Grown-ups Only, everyone else is asleep

This section needs at least a half-dozen short scenes to separate the longer sections, along the lines of what somebody would overhear when walking to or from the bar. This is where the more racy stuff goes, since the youngsters other than Chiyo-chan are supposedly asleep.

Akari, Aria, and Maya are elsewhere, so don't include them in any scenes. (And if nobody mentions Usagi or Mamoru during the after-party, well... it's pretty obvious where they've gone off to.)


Quote:Mao, Urd, and Ryoko polishing off a case keg of beer between them.

Though I'd be more concerned about what happens to Kurtz once he gets a few drinks in him and makes a pass at both Urd and Ryoko. Ben: "Awww shit. Guys, eyes up just in case we need to take cover."

Am I the only one seeing a drinking contest between Urd, Mihoshi, Ryoko, and Jayne?
Put this before the scene where Kurz makes a pass at Alicia.


Quote:DARTZ: [the morality of having sex with any of the 33-Stars] Would be an interesting conversation with Inara, if someone dares to go there.

"Inara and Sylvie sharing pointers in her private chambers?"

----- cut

"Emotionally, that can lead to insecurity and dependance, something that could be dangerous,"


Samhain

Nothing is marked... but until D-Day, everything is still subject to change.


The Next Day

This section needs a few short scenes to separate the longer sections, along the lines of what somebody would overhear from the next table over at breakfast.
--
Rob Kelk

Sticks and stones can break your bones,
But words can break your heart.
- unknown


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RE: [OOC][PLOT] The Fifth Thread of Planning for Arc 1 - Arrivals - by robkelk - 10-05-2019, 10:38 AM

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