[OOC][PLOT][ARC 1] Planning for Season 1 - The Retcon

[robkelk]

Every time I read Francis Xavier I'm afraid X-Men are going to show up, and then I'm like, wait, wrong guy.  I do like the buried plots here: a gym where the hot water doesn't work.

What it's missing to me is description of Epsilon.  Either physical, or personal history, or motivation for taking the job.  The Epsilon/Upsilon bit is funny enough for spatula girl (Does he know the woman behind Rho v. Wade?).  What's there seems to work, it's just that other whole pieces of story feel missing, like how people feel on arriving at a new home, or who brought them there, or what do they think of their new rooms, or did Epsilon manage to give the entire tour without Ryoga getting lost even once?  I know your starting point was that thread wondering how displacees would make money, and I know these are not your main residents, but it seems a little too focused on one goal.

Possibly that's fine if we mix it with stories from other residences showing other people react that way; I suppose it could get a little repetitive if every residence had a "oh look here's your room" section.

On the other hand, this part of the Metacontinuity is never going to be as important as the parts with self-inserts in residence, or the parts with characters that we're telling stories about on a regular basis. There's already some description of Epsilon in the scene; additional description can wait until it's plot-relevant IMHO.