(09-24-2022, 04:06 AM)Labster Wrote: Okay, second draft of the Risky/Safety + SI story is done. It's probably good enough for feedback now, so please other writers, please review it on the wiki.
(Second draft implies I at least read the thing once and made changes based on what I read. First draft is not a thing I share anywhere, typically)
I'll move on to the next section, now that I've written a story no one knew we needed.
* robkelk sets that section aside for a day without reading the changes as they come in
* robkelk reads that section as a whole, a day later
* robkelk corrects one grammatical error ("She has thick ponytail" to "She had a thick ponytail")
* robkelk adds a footnote about the casual use of office supplies
Looking good, even despite - or because of - the swings in the mood of the interview. I think you have the interviewers in character, and there's a good amount of overall plot information delivered in the scene.
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Rob Kelk
Sticks and stones can break your bones,
But words can break your heart.
- unknown
Rob Kelk
Sticks and stones can break your bones,
But words can break your heart.
- unknown