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[STORY/XOVER] Legend of Galactic Girls
 
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Oh, concrit! I believe Lisa asking Luna (the Ravenclaw) to take care of Luna (the cat) is the first time the latter comes up, which is incredibly jarring. Unless the Girls made the cat up on the spot, or you're trying to help us get into Noah's overwork-addled mind, a little warning would be nice
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[No subject] - by robkelk - 04-20-2008, 11:06 PM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 07-08-2008, 07:37 PM
Teaser #2 for Chapter 3 - by robkelk - 12-23-2008, 02:23 AM
RE-WRITE of Prologue - by robkelk - 02-06-2009, 02:26 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 06-30-2009, 01:54 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 09-07-2009, 02:27 AM
[No subject] - by Star Ranger4 - 09-07-2009, 09:42 PM
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[No subject] - by robkelk - 04-02-2012, 03:12 PM
[No subject] - by Proginoskes - 04-04-2012, 04:16 PM
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