Looks good...
You might want to change a bit of wording: "»Who cares they sell them for catgirls? If you ever got one of their showers" sounds a bit like the 'them' refers to people, not showers, so maybe: "Who cares if they sell the showers for catgirls?" might read better.
Should "with the idea of a joined company based" be a "joint company"?
I don't understand the meaning of "the few ‘enter torpedos’ the asteroid was".
"The products ranges from simple furniture" should be "range".
"Since the foundation of the company Catgirl Industries has been owning a third" should be "has owned".
"‘first buyer’ right if the the other"; double 'the'.
"a few Exocomps around, living with the catgirls form Jenga" should be 'from'.
"Much of the earning of the company is" should be "earnings of the company are".
"extension of this caves" should be 'these'.
Not edits but...
I'm assuming this is the 'kiri' tree: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paulownia
You might want to add Hemp to the bio caves: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hemp , http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hemp#Fiber .
This has major advantages over cotton (much less water use), and I'm sure with waved tools would satisfy almost all fabric needs. The seeds are also good for food (an excellent source of protein), 'hemp milk' is comparable to 'soya milk', and you also get edible 'hemp oil'.
Liberatrix could end up an importer of CHON, and an exporter of food, if they wanted.
http://www.fenspace.net/index.php5?title=CHON
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"It is the business of the future to be dangerous" - Hawkwind
You might want to change a bit of wording: "»Who cares they sell them for catgirls? If you ever got one of their showers" sounds a bit like the 'them' refers to people, not showers, so maybe: "Who cares if they sell the showers for catgirls?" might read better.
Should "with the idea of a joined company based" be a "joint company"?
I don't understand the meaning of "the few ‘enter torpedos’ the asteroid was".
"The products ranges from simple furniture" should be "range".
"Since the foundation of the company Catgirl Industries has been owning a third" should be "has owned".
"‘first buyer’ right if the the other"; double 'the'.
"a few Exocomps around, living with the catgirls form Jenga" should be 'from'.
"Much of the earning of the company is" should be "earnings of the company are".
"extension of this caves" should be 'these'.
Not edits but...
I'm assuming this is the 'kiri' tree: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paulownia
You might want to add Hemp to the bio caves: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hemp , http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hemp#Fiber .
This has major advantages over cotton (much less water use), and I'm sure with waved tools would satisfy almost all fabric needs. The seeds are also good for food (an excellent source of protein), 'hemp milk' is comparable to 'soya milk', and you also get edible 'hemp oil'.
Liberatrix could end up an importer of CHON, and an exporter of food, if they wanted.
http://www.fenspace.net/index.php5?title=CHON
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"It is the business of the future to be dangerous" - Hawkwind