The Prologue And Chapter One...

[Bob Schroeck]

there's a double 'and' early in the meeting with McGonnagall

Another minor grammar quibble

Fixed now, but the online copy won't be updated until I get home tonight.

So, the new prophecy that Trelawney made is only for the benefit of the reader, as no one was present, and she doesn't remember her own prophecies?

Correct. I actually left a note to that effect in the Concordance.

you appear to have misspelled her last name

Argh. I went out of my way to make sure I got it right in chapter two (as she's about to appear in the scene I'm currently writing), but forgot to check chapter one. Grrrrrrr.

The first paragraph following that is missing the period between the first and second sentences.

Grr. You're not the first to notice that. And I thought I'd fixed it. Turns out I did in the text version of the chapter, but not the HTML. Argh.

Also: I think I've mentioned this before, but if not, I love the concordances.

They're terribly fun to write, too. I'm doing things a bit differently this time, btw -- previously I've waited until I'm done writing a chapter and then go over it looking for things to gloss. This time I'm writing the concordance in parallel with the text. Which of course means that every time I edit something that had a gloss I have to go to the concordance and edit the gloss, too. But the upshot is I don't forget anything that I was thinking of when I wrote any particular passage. So it ends up a bit more detailed and dense than the previous stories' concordances.
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.