Let me second CD here -- I don't think the scene is bad at all, it just needs a little fine-tuning. McGonnigal would be more self-controlled, even in the face of that kind of provocation.
As for Michael's reaction... well, judging by my memories of being that age, he's probably right on target, and finely-balanced at that. The merest change of emotional context could shove him to either more conciliatory or even more in-your-face, but I think the place he is right now is on the money.
-- Bob
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It's a "magical" land. I think "magical" is ancient Greek for "pain in the butt". -- Bun-Bun, Sluggy Freelance, 11/9/03
As for Michael's reaction... well, judging by my memories of being that age, he's probably right on target, and finely-balanced at that. The merest change of emotional context could shove him to either more conciliatory or even more in-your-face, but I think the place he is right now is on the money.
-- Bob
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It's a "magical" land. I think "magical" is ancient Greek for "pain in the butt". -- Bun-Bun, Sluggy Freelance, 11/9/03