Whee feedback. Thanks.
I also thought war hammer was one word, but in these cases I ussualy defer to my spell checker. I'll leave it as it is for consistencies sake.
but then that is always the problem with stream of conciousness type writing.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."
I also thought war hammer was one word, but in these cases I ussualy defer to my spell checker. I'll leave it as it is for consistencies sake.
Quote:Gah I thought I finnaly worked past that problem. Well time to get to work then, this should be the only runon sentence in there; "Hayate's head hurt, one moment she was talking to a cat and the next there where all these voices saying horrible things and so much blood and suffering and pain and..."
I think this is a run on sentence. Actually all of the sentences after that line are in my opinion, and a good bit of the sentences before that one are also run on sentences actually. You seem to have a lot of them.
but then that is always the problem with stream of conciousness type writing.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."