anowack, you're right about the...I dunno, word choices, line edits, whatever they should be called. Thanks for the comment on the scene pacing.
I'll probably keep the rest of this moving at the current relative speed.
SkyeFire...huh, well, I'm glad it works. One thing I'm trying to do is to present a reasonable portrayal of all the key Naruto cast. Giving everyone a fair shake, as it were. It always annoys me when a fanfic author has a dislike against a particular character, and makes that all too apparent.
As for Kabuto...well, he's twisted. Who knows what he's thinking? =)
I'll probably work on editing the couple bits I've already put up...and post revised versions sometime over the weekend, along with any new material I've gotten out of draft stage.
-- Acyl
I'll probably keep the rest of this moving at the current relative speed.
SkyeFire...huh, well, I'm glad it works. One thing I'm trying to do is to present a reasonable portrayal of all the key Naruto cast. Giving everyone a fair shake, as it were. It always annoys me when a fanfic author has a dislike against a particular character, and makes that all too apparent.
As for Kabuto...well, he's twisted. Who knows what he's thinking? =)
I'll probably work on editing the couple bits I've already put up...and post revised versions sometime over the weekend, along with any new material I've gotten out of draft stage.
-- Acyl