Nicely done, Bob. I really couldn't find anything wrong with it on the first read. I caught up with what Jennifer was about a minute or two before the denouement (not the shortest time for the realization; that goes to one of the best "Holy Sh*t" moments in cinema, when Hannibal Lector pulls the other guy's face off of his in the ambulance in "Silence of the Lambs." That one caught up to me literally as the scene changed.). Looking forward to the final chapter. It'll be, to paraphrase the Bunny, a lulu.
Oh, and "Wake up; time to die!" was said by Brion James, or Leon, in "Blade Runner," not Rutger Hauer. He also said, "Nothing is worse than an itch that you cannot scratch," which goes in my book as one of the best combat nonsequiturs in cinema. Both lines are said during James' "Beat Harrison Ford Senseless" scene, before Sean Young blows his brains out.
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Oh, and "Wake up; time to die!" was said by Brion James, or Leon, in "Blade Runner," not Rutger Hauer. He also said, "Nothing is worse than an itch that you cannot scratch," which goes in my book as one of the best combat nonsequiturs in cinema. Both lines are said during James' "Beat Harrison Ford Senseless" scene, before Sean Young blows his brains out.
Ebony the Black Dragon
Senior Editor, Living Room Games
www.lrgames.com
Ebony the Black Dragon
http://ebony14.livejournal.com
"Good night, and may the Good Lord take a Viking to you."