I'm not an artist, I'll state that up front. But I do tend to be good at spotting what's wrong with a drawing (or so claim some artist friends of
mine).
I think what Fox is noticing, in part, is the hand positioning. Ye Olde Google pulls up two great (IMO) examples of traditional Japanese flute players. See
here:
Pic 1
Pic 2
As you can see, the common element in both of those is the rotation of the hands. In your sketch, Nogi's hands are both cupping the outside of the flute;
in the pictures I linked, only the left hand does that. The right hand is rotated and grasps the flute from the other side.
Just for grins, here's a third of a ... more modern approach. Note the hand positions, however.
Pic 3
Lastly, and it may just be me, or the fact that it's still in the 'sketch' stage, but the hip positioning seems a bit off. More specifically, it
appears that the cloth is tucked between the legs -- which is fine -- but if you look at the right leg it appears that her body is twisted. Her knees
don't line up properly for someone kneeling in that position. Alternatively, she's got a sudden widening of the hips going on (at odds with her narrow
torso) and is not, in fact, wearing skin-tight garb under that cloak. I can't quite tell.
On the plus side, I think you've nailed the arm positioning, which is tricky considering it's a female figure and the pose means an arm has to drape
across the breasts. A bit more depth there would be nice, but that'd be in the shadowing stage, I think.
--sofaspud
--"Listening to your kid is the audio equivalent of a Salvador Dali painting, Spud." --OpMegs
mine).
I think what Fox is noticing, in part, is the hand positioning. Ye Olde Google pulls up two great (IMO) examples of traditional Japanese flute players. See
here:
Pic 1
Pic 2
As you can see, the common element in both of those is the rotation of the hands. In your sketch, Nogi's hands are both cupping the outside of the flute;
in the pictures I linked, only the left hand does that. The right hand is rotated and grasps the flute from the other side.
Just for grins, here's a third of a ... more modern approach. Note the hand positions, however.
Pic 3
Lastly, and it may just be me, or the fact that it's still in the 'sketch' stage, but the hip positioning seems a bit off. More specifically, it
appears that the cloth is tucked between the legs -- which is fine -- but if you look at the right leg it appears that her body is twisted. Her knees
don't line up properly for someone kneeling in that position. Alternatively, she's got a sudden widening of the hips going on (at odds with her narrow
torso) and is not, in fact, wearing skin-tight garb under that cloak. I can't quite tell.
On the plus side, I think you've nailed the arm positioning, which is tricky considering it's a female figure and the pose means an arm has to drape
across the breasts. A bit more depth there would be nice, but that'd be in the shadowing stage, I think.
--sofaspud
--"Listening to your kid is the audio equivalent of a Salvador Dali painting, Spud." --OpMegs