Thinking about rewrites...

[robkelk]

Recaps are usually good. Long, drawn-out recaps aren't.

I recall there's a spot or two in the story where Doug thinks that JKR's wizards and witches aren't very powerful. One of his comments to that effect might be a good spot to insert a quick (one- or two-sentence) description of how Doug's magegift works as a point of comparison, and then mention that he's aware of even more powerful mages back home.