I can tell you that it looks good -- and I only spotted one grammar glitch in the narrative voice that I can recall. (I don't count grammar glitches in
dialogue any more, unless they're really awful, since that's the way most people talk.)
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.
dialogue any more, unless they're really awful, since that's the way most people talk.)
-- Bob
---------
Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.